2025年新高考 II 卷短文续写评分标准

及评分示范（考前必读）​

一、写作要求

Ø 阅读原文并把握关键信息：认真研读给定的 350 词以内短文，明确故事背景、人物关系、主要情节及矛盾冲突等关键内容。例如 2023 年全国高考英语新课标 II 卷的 “读后续写” 原文，讲述了移民美国的巴西中学生在社会学老师鼓励下参加写作比赛的故事，考生需把握作者从对写作不感兴趣到参与并享受写作过程这一关键转变。​

Ø 依据段落开头语续写：续写分为两段，每段开头语已给出，要紧密围绕开头语展开后续情节，使故事发展自然流畅。如 2023 年该卷中，第一段首句是 “几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息”，考生应据此续写消息的具体内容，如作者获奖的消息。​

Ø 续写词数要求：续写部分总词数应控制在 150 词左右（不包括已给出的两段开头语），词数过少会因内容不完整扣分，过多则可能导致重点不突出且易出现语言错误。​

Ø 词汇使用要求：若题目有明确要求，需至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语，通过巧妙运用这些关键词，确保续写内容与原文紧密相连。​

Ø 内容要求：续写内容要与原文情境高度融合，情节发展符合逻辑，具有合理性和连贯性，同时要展现一定的创造性思维，对故事中的情景、人物态度和感情进行详细生动的描述，使故事更加丰富立体。​

二、新高考 II 卷短文续写评分标准​

1.第七档（22 - 25 分）​

Ø 内容方面：创造出极为丰富、合理的情节，逻辑性极强，续写部分完整且与原文情境融洽度极高。例如，在续写参加写作比赛的故事时，能生动描述颁奖典礼的盛大场景，作者在台上的激动心情，以及对老师的深深感激之情，且这些情节与原文作者对写作态度的转变紧密契合。​

Ø 语言表达方面：运用多样且精准恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达极为流畅，几乎不存在语言错误，即便有个别小错也完全不影响对文章的理解。如能熟练运用非谓语动词、各类从句、高级形容词和动词等，像 “Overwhelmed with excitement, I stepped onto the stage, my heart pounding wildly.”​

Ø 篇章结构方面：自然且高效地运用段落间、句间衔接手段，使全文结构清晰明了，前后呼应紧密，意义连贯流畅。比如使用 “Not only... but also...”“Therefore”“Furthermore” 等连接词，以及通过代词指代等方式实现语句间的自然过渡。​

2.第六档（18 - 21 分）​

Ø 内容方面：创造的内容比较丰富、合理，具有较强逻辑性，续写较为完整，与原文情境融洽度较高。例如，在续写故事时，能合理想象作者获奖后的反应，如与同学分享喜悦，对未来写作有了新的规划等，且这些情节与原文风格一致。​

Ø 语言表达方面：使用比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，可能存在个别语言错误，但不会对理解造成影响。例如，能运用一些较复杂的句式，如 “Having received the award, I felt a great sense of accomplishment.” 同时词汇运用较为准确，像 “elated”“aspiration” 等词的使用。​

Ø 篇章结构方面：比较有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。能恰当使用 “However”“Meanwhile” 等连接词，使文章段落之间过渡自然。​

3.第五档（15 - 17 分）​

Ø 内容方面：创造的内容基本合理，具备一定逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关。例如，在写作比赛的续写中，能描述作者获奖后简单的庆祝活动，以及对老师的感谢，情节虽不复杂但符合故事发展。​

Ø 语言表达方面：使用比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式有一定局限性，存在些许错误，但基本不影响理解。主要运用常见词汇和简单语法结构，如 “I was very happy when I knew I won the prize. I thanked my teacher a lot.”​

Ø 篇章结构方面：使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。如使用 “Then”“And” 等简单连接词来连接句子和段落。​

4.第四档（11 - 14 分）​

Ø 内容方面：创造出基本完整的故事内容，但部分情节可能不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关。比如在续写时，出现作者获奖后反应过于平淡或情节发展突然等情况，但大致能与原文衔接。​

Ø 语言表达方面：使用简单的词汇和语法结构，存在部分语言错误和不恰当之处，个别部分会影响理解。例如，频繁使用简单句，语法错误如 “He go to the teacher's office to say thanks.”​

Ø 篇章结构方面：有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。虽能使用一些简单连接词，但有时衔接不够自然，如 “And then, he get the prize.”​

5.第三档（6 - 10 分）​

Ø 内容方面：内容和逻辑上存在一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有一定程度脱节。例如，在写作比赛续写中，出现与写作比赛无关的新情节，且情节混乱，无法与原文合理衔接。​

Ø 语言表达方面：所用词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且多为低级错误，严重影响理解。如句子结构混乱，用词不准确，“I very like writing after win the competition.”​

Ø 篇章结构方面：未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯。文章段落之间缺乏逻辑联系，句子堆砌现象明显。​

6.第二档（1 - 5 分）​

Ø 内容方面：内容和逻辑上存在较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄袭原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节。例如，大部分内容重复原文，或续写内容完全偏离故事主题。​

Ø 语言表达方面：所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解。几乎无法正确运用常见词汇和基本语法，如 “Me win competition, very happy.”​

Ø 篇章结构方面：几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。文章不成篇章，只是单词和短语的随意组合。​

7. 第一档（0 分）：

Ø 未作答；所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。​

三、学生作文评分示范（七级、六级、五级、四级）​

2023年新高考全国II卷短文续写题目如下：

题目：以 2023 年全国高考英语新课标 II 卷 “读后续写” 为例（讲述移民美国的巴西中学生在社会学老师鼓励下参加写作比赛的故事）。​

阅读材料

When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.

So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: "Because I love your stories. If you're willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this." Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.

I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠)in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse's mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else's choice.

What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere's horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.

When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, "Great. Now, write it again." I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn't win, I wouldn't care.

续写要求

1. 续写词数应为150个左右。

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.

I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.

1.七档（22 - 25 分）作文示例​

续写内容：​

Paragraph 1：Weeks later, when I had almost forgotten about the contest, there came the news that I had won the first prize. I was stunned, my eyes widening in disbelief. The moment the words registered in my mind, I let out an ear - splitting scream of joy. My classmates, startled by the sudden outburst, quickly gathered around, their eyes filled with curiosity and envy. I could barely contain my excitement as I rushed to share the glorious news with my friends. Thoughts of my countless hours of hard work, the painstaking process of revising my story again and again under the guidance of my teacher, all flashed before my eyes. It was all worth it.​

Paragraph 2：After the award presentation, I made a beeline for my teacher's office. With a heart full of gratitude, I knocked on the door gently. As I entered, my teacher looked up, a warm smile lighting up her face. “Congratulations, my dear!” she exclaimed. I walked up to her, my voice choked with emotion. “Thank you so much, Mrs. Smith. Without your unwavering encouragement and patient guidance, I would never have dared to participate, let alone win. You have not only changed my attitude towards writing but also inspired me to believe in myself.” She patted me on the shoulder affectionately and said, “I always knew you had it in you. Keep writing, and never stop exploring your creativity.”​

评分理由：​

Ø 内容方面：创造了丰富且合理的内容，如详细描绘得知获奖时的震惊与喜悦，以及去老师办公室真挚的感恩场景，逻辑严密，与原文作者对写作态度转变的情境完美融合，续写完整。​

Ø 语言表达方面：词汇丰富多样，如 “stunned”“ear - splitting”“glorious”“choked with emotion” 等；语法结构复杂且准确，像 “The moment the words registered in my mind, I let out an ear - splitting scream of joy.”（时间状语从句），“Without your unwavering encouragement and patient guidance, I would never have dared to participate, let alone win.”（虚拟语气）等，表达流畅，无语言错误。​

Ø 篇章结构方面：自然运用 “when”“As”“After” 等衔接词，以及代词指代等，使段落间、句间过渡自然，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。​

2.六档（18 - 21 分）作文示例​

题目：同七档题目。​

续写内容：​

Paragraph 1：Weeks later, when I had nearly forgotten about the competition, the news arrived that I had won an award. I was extremely excited, jumping up and down in my seat. My friends, who were nearby, were surprised by my sudden excitement. They congratulated me sincerely, and I couldn't wait to tell everyone about it. I thought about all the efforts I had put into writing, the long nights of thinking and revising. It was a great feeling to be recognized.​

Paragraph 2：After the award ceremony, I went straight to my teacher's office. When I entered, my teacher smiled at me and said, “Well done, I knew you could do it.” I walked up to her and said, “Thank you so much, Mrs. Johnson. You encouraged me to try, and I'm so glad I did. Your advice on writing really helped me improve.” She nodded and said, “Keep up the good work. Writing can bring you a lot of joy if you stick with it.”​

评分理由：​

Ø 内容方面：内容比较丰富合理，描述了获奖后的兴奋和向老师表达感谢，有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高。​

Ø 语言表达方面：词汇较为多样，如 “extremely”“sincerely” 等；语法结构运用得当，如 “who were nearby”（定语从句），“I couldn't wait to tell everyone about it.” 等，表达流畅，有个别小错误但不影响理解，如 “the news arrived that” 表述稍显不地道，更常用 “the news came that”。​

Ø 篇章结构方面：使用 “when”“After” 等衔接词，使文章结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。​

3.五档（15 - 17 分）作文示例​

题目：同七档题目。​

续写内容：​

Paragraph 1：Weeks later, I got the news that I won the writing contest. I was very happy and told my classmates about it. They all said congratulations to me. I thought about how hard I worked on my story, and I was glad that my efforts paid off. I decided to keep writing in the future.​

Paragraph 2：After the award presentation, I went to my teacher's office. I said “Thank you” to my teacher. She told me that I did a good job and asked me to keep writing. I told her that I would. I was really grateful to her for helping me.​

评分理由：​

Ø 内容方面：创造了基本合理的内容，描述了获奖后的告知同学和感谢老师的情节，有一定逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关。​

Ø 语言表达方面：词汇使用恰当但不够丰富，多为常见词汇；语法结构以简单句为主，如 “I was very happy and told my classmates about it.”，存在一些简单表达，如直接说 “I said ‘Thank you’ to my teacher.”，但基本能正确表达意思，错误较少不影响理解。​

Ø 篇章结构方面：使用了简单的衔接词 “and” 等，使文章结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。​

4、四档（11 - 14 分）作文示例​

题目：同七档题目。​

续写内容：​

Paragraph 1：Weeks later, I heard that I won something in the writing competition. I felt happy. I told my friends, and they were happy for me too. I worked hard on my story, so I was not too surprised. I want to write more stories in the future.​

Paragraph 2：After I got the award, I went to see my teacher. I thanked her because she helped me. She said I was good at writing and should keep it up. I said I would try. I think writing is fun now.​

评分理由：​

Ø 内容方面：创造了基本完整的故事内容，但情节比较简单平淡，部分表述如 “won something” 不够明确，逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关。​

Ø 语言表达方面：词汇简单，语法结构单调，多为简单句和常见表达，如 “I want to write more stories in the future.” 存在一些语法小错误，如 “After I got the award, I went to see my teacher.” 中 “got” 可改为 “received” 更合适，但整体不严重影响理解。​

Ø 篇章结构方面：有一定语句衔接意识，使用 “and”“After” 等词，使全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。